After reading "ode on melancholy", a poem written by John Keats which deals with sadness in an interesting way, we were told to create a presentation, which I did with Benjamin Morer and Salvador Tognolini, hopeyou like it.
Boys, very good work. My comments: 1st paragraph: Remember not to repeat what the quote says, as you did in the first part of the paragraph. Also try to use a variety of language to avoid repetition, for example, of "as". It's sometimes better to write shorter sentences. The same when you repeat the quote of the yew berries. Just quoting it once is enough. 2nd paragraph: Very good. But also be careful when you state that there may be no reason why we feel melancholic. The poem seems to argue that it's because there's beauty that there's sorrow, so once beauty fades away, we feel sad.
Boys, very good work.
ResponderEliminarMy comments:
1st paragraph: Remember not to repeat what the quote says, as you did in the first part of the paragraph. Also try to use a variety of language to avoid repetition, for example, of "as". It's sometimes better to write shorter sentences. The same when you repeat the quote of the yew berries. Just quoting it once is enough.
2nd paragraph: Very good. But also be careful when you state that there may be no reason why we feel melancholic. The poem seems to argue that it's because there's beauty that there's sorrow, so once beauty fades away, we feel sad.